#2 TOEFL Essay
The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.
Everything is changing as time flies by. About 13 years ago, new millennium and another century began with enormous anticipation from people around the world. Since the new era began, the developing technology in different areas have been giving huge influence on people's lifestyle, perspective, lifespan and many other uncountable things. But amongst all those developments, technological development in biological area definitely gave and will give quite huge change in the new 21st century. Biological technology had developed a lot since the late 20th century and human is now able to clone animals, use nanotechnology to cure diseases and transplant organs for longer life.
Once upon a time in a story about ancient China, Qin Shi Huang made numerous attempt to reach immortality. Human being always tried to live a longer life and get free of diseases, and it did have better result; human's lifespan increased a lot than past years, and the biggest reason for this must be the discovery of different kinds of remedies to diseases. As the medical area developed, remedies for diseases which were called as 'untreatable' appeared, such as chicken pox. These days, we can even see the news saying that the cancer patient survived thanks to successful transplanting surgery, and that doctors are developing a cure for Alzheimer, and soon will be able to use it. In short future, cures using cloned animal or human will be developed and used too since cloning animal is already possible nowadays. Recently, scientists found a way to reduce the rejection from human body which occurs when different creature's organ is transplanted, and they said that sooner or later, human will be able to get safe and healthy organs from pigs, and have them transplanted. In the left years of 21st century, we will surely be able to see more development in the area, and find more remedies for dangerous diseases, and this will make human being's lifespan much longer than before.
There also are disadvantageous aspects of biological development, and the most serious expected problem is upcoming of an aging society. As human's lifespan gets longer, and as the medical technology to cure the diseases develop more, the number of elderly increases. Comparatively, the ratio of young people decreases a lot because of the lowering birth rate. This makes the proportion of working people decrease, causes the economic welfare difficulties, and many other social problems. With the aging society, issues about dignity of both human and animal due to development of biological technology is also being concerned and one example which shows it is animal's uses. Some scientists say that animal experiments are needed when carving and developing a new area in biology because we cannot use it directly to human without any security, so countless animals are dying from experiments. It is not only experiments where the animals are used; cloned animal's right might be ignored if their organs are used for human being like I've mentioned in upper paragraph. These abuse of animals which seem to increase a lot in short future causes conflict with people who try to support animal's right. Human rights problem from cloning is also an issue amongst people, and is one of the biggest concern about future which comes from developed technology.
GM's inventor Charles Kettering once said that "We should all be concerned about the future because we will have to spend the rest of our lives there." Future is where we will live, and what we all should be concerned of, and that future is made of what we do in present. As the 21st century began, many changes already happened and for the left 87 years of 21st century, there will be much more changes, depending on what we do now. I truly hope that people living now could wisely make a development in many different areas and think seriously about the possible problems which might occur if we try to make a development in wrong way, and be able to hand over a better world to live for our descendant.
I think it was great idea to use one or two examples that really add the depth to the essay. Great Job!
답글삭제Good essay!
답글삭제I see you organized your essay to explain the change and the adverse effects... interesting
Just one part I have questions about:
you talked about life ethics.. do you think 'animal rights' deal the core of the problem?
Do animals have rights? What made you state so?
Good job! I liked how you have various quotes and anecdotes. However, the story of the Chinese emperor could have been used as a hook in introduction to make the easy more interesting. Also, some topics you mention seems to go a bit further than the expansion of lifespan, your main topic.
답글삭제Otherwise, I really like your essay!